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Shakespeare; Browning; Blake; Cope; Duffy; Hardy; Marlowe.
Name a poet and they've written about love.
'Cept they've all got money, contracts and a great start.
But i'm not complaining.
Just need my pen; paper; your love and my heart.
[Which is yours and in training]

So lets change the rhyme and stanza structure.
[As we know the last line will end in erupture]
Shall we start with how you make me feel?
Or how when i'm with you it seems so surreal.

Maybe I should tell the audience
           - or maybe we should.
Of the breath I miss in your endurance
          - or lack of what could.

How my hear beats faster around you
          - yet slower aswell.
Of the dancing canaries [Oh how they do!]
          - in my mind they tell.

Will you let me write of your touch in it's best?
[But not all of it - no I think i'll leave the rest!]
Can I tell them of great memories?
Or how it feels like i'm living in a dream?

Now we're this far lets go deeper in my mind.
[But how far to go? Now what do you want to find?]
You can search but i've already found
A love that takes me up away off the ground.

By now they'll know what you mean to me.
          -oh it's mighty swell!
I'm captivated, you're all that I see.
          -like under a spell.

Let's write more cliché.
And see what they say.
Fall and i'll catch you.
Nothing I wont do.
Now hold me close by.
Now don't let me cry.
Know you make me smile.
Make it all worth while.
Miss you when you're gone.
Heart feels like a song.
Hate when you're not there.
Miss you like the air.

So like a violet rose laid out on paper.
[It's just as beautiful but this will stay here!]
Laid bare my feelings true and splender.
So read but don't forget that I am tender.

Or how about I write none of that?
          -instead I just say:
''I love you''
Oh what a poem that would be!
[So true and entirely written by me]
©2007-2009 ~abbebe
:iconabbebe:

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Yeah I know it's not valentines day yet. Shuttup i dont care lol. :P

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:iconabbebe:
Lol :)

--
[Lust]
If this is a sin then may I burn!
I can't help it my dear, for you I yearn!
Groan; scream; lips; movement; thrust; smooth; oh!
[He did tease her till she could not say no]
Love under sexual tension
:iconabbebe:
:)

--
[Lust]
If this is a sin then may I burn!
I can't help it my dear, for you I yearn!
Groan; scream; lips; movement; thrust; smooth; oh!
[He did tease her till she could not say no]
Love under sexual tension
:iconlovespoon:
lol funny.

Shelly didn't have money, but I know what you mean. ;)

:teddy:

--
"Women may fake orgasms, but men fake entire relationships."

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:iconsimonstclare:
hello. i was just looking for photos in the contacts of my contacts and when the arrow from my mouse (not sure of the proper name -it's not really a cursor is it?) hovered over your 'Shakespeare; Browning; Blake' poem it began to scroll past...

i don't normally read poetry because it has never appealed to me, but when i read this poem it made me feel soppy and whistful (and i sighed...)! it's very well written. Did you do a-level english?

Also, my punctuation isn't so great and i'm never sure when to choose between semi-colons, commas or hyphens (i didn't do a-level english, i barely did gcse english!)

When the poem stopped scrolling past it ended on 'Maybe I should tell the audience
- or maybe we should.'

-which i thought was a great ending because of the way it left the poem hanging with the suggestion, but then i clicked on the thumbnail and i realised it wasn't really the ending. Keep up the good work. i'm gonna read some more more of your poems and probably i may post a few more comments.
:iconabbebe:
Thank you very much :)

Colons are more when the sentence goes onto another part of itslef, like a comma but the break is bigger. Colons are used to emphasise a sub gnre of that sentence, or indicate a list.

And yes, I am currently studying A-level English :)

--
[Lust]
If this is a sin then may I burn!
I can't help it my dear, for you I yearn!
Groan; scream; lips; movement; thrust; smooth; oh!
[He did tease her till she could not say no]
Love under sexual tension
:iconlordbetterthanyou:
It seems almost tautological of that Ordinary Boys song. But, you know, BETTER.

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[link]
:iconabbebe:
I havnt heard it..

--
[Lust]
If this is a sin then may I burn!
I can't help it my dear, for you I yearn!
Groan; scream; lips; movement; thrust; smooth; oh!
[He did tease her till she could not say no]
Love under sexual tension
:iconlordbetterthanyou:
"I've heard all the tired cliches, but I don't know what cliche to say. So lets be hasty, let's be wreckless *blah blah blah * just leaves me breathless. I love you. You know that, don't you?"

--
[link]
:iconabbebe:
Oh.

--
[Lust]
If this is a sin then may I burn!
I can't help it my dear, for you I yearn!
Groan; scream; lips; movement; thrust; smooth; oh!
[He did tease her till she could not say no]
Love under sexual tension
:iconpoetically-yours:
Wow, you really have an exquisite handle on the english language on this one. I can almost picture you on stage and this as some running monologue in some great romantic story yet to be written.

Kudos, I'm faving this one.

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